La Monstrua
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So many years ago,
You took the only love I had ever known.
What was your motive?
What did you gain?
No one knew at the time,
That you were determined to win the game.
You couldn’t accept he loved me more,
You could accept the life we had in store.
Growing so vindictive and full of rage,
Like a lion who wished to escape its cage.
No, wait-let’s rephrase that,
You can’t be a lion.
You have no courage,
You have no spine.
You are more like a serpent,
Or worse yet a bug.
A parasite that eats its prey,
A black widow,
Who was silently hanging in the rafters above.
You waited for the perfect moment,
And you took what you thought you had a right to.
Then you lied to everyone,
And made them feel sorry for you.
You actually made them even believe your stories,
All your poisoned little lies.
When you yourself know deep inside,
That it’s you they should despise.
So go on with your stories,
Go on with your games.
You pretend you are someone good,
But you are really still the same.
A wicked creature,
Who still walks upon this earth.
While the person that I loved the most,
Rests silently just as the dirt.
The man who loved so many,
The man who was so good in heart.
Lost his life because of you,
While you tore my world apart.
2012 (Copyright) J'aime Rubio
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@ Vincent- Yes it is for a female monster. It is about the lady I feel was responsible for the death of my fiance many years ago. She was his ex and the mother of his children. She lied to everyone about her whereabouts when he died and the landlady told me she saw her trying to sneak in the back of his apartment because she "forgot something" as the ambulance took him away. It took years for his family to finally realize she is a liar and now many people believe what I have thought all along, but sadly the police wouldn't investigate and ruled his death, self inflicted. To this day I know in my heart she did it, and I will die knowing that is the truth. She is the epitome of evil...and why? Because he was going to take her kids away from her because she was unfit and selling drugs and he wanted better for them. After he died she got his life insurance, social security benefits for the kids and she has NEVER had to work...before that she was about to get kicked off of welfare and would have been homeless. She had everything to gain....she is evil.
I am so sorry for your loss, this was a painful angry write that drips with both your sorrow and rage, I wish you only happiness as you try and move forward knowing that both you and he deserved better
Thank you Nighthag---this was over 10 years ago, but due to a certain conversation I had with an old friend tonight, it brought back memories fresh in my mind and I felt I needed to get it out onto the page. Thank you for reading!
Nice write, Sweet Lady, your expressions bite like a hungry pit bull. Your rhymes flow like a smooth river running through a lush valley. put together all fit like a rubix cube,very tight.
Cleaner3- Its funny you mention a pit bull. One of my dear friends told me I am tenacious as a pit bull...thus the name LADY TENAZ..I can see that you can see my personality bleeds onto the page. Thank you so much for enjoying my work, it makes all the writing worthwhile to know others enjoy it. As they say "Literature is the art of writing something that will be read twice".....thank you again!
What a tragedy - and I am so sorry for your loss and can understand your rage. These kinds of writings can help - to take some of the pain out and lay it on the page. Is it appropriate to say well done? - it is meant as a compliment. Keep writing...and best wishes to you.
Duffsmom- Thank you so much for such a nice comment. I really appreciate it, and yes my writing has helped me so much and I am glad I have that as a creative outlet.
It's simply beautiful, when one narrates, a scene so direct, through writing.
Those nagging feelings which one sometimes feels because when that incident turns out to be one of possessive and vindictive acts, which results in lost of human life . These writings even if only in the form of one line, becomes that written word which will forever be that truthful reminder, the price for which, only the Most High God, can have answers.
A direct message that's has a bulls eye on the target. Great work.
Bless.
I am so sorry JJ. I feel your hurt. Can you forget? Please try.. You have a lot to give. Your poetry is beautiful..Blessings my friend
Jaime this is a powerful poem/story of anger and vindication sought; perhaps the only vindication a person could have under the circumstances. But remember my friend; it may take some time for the pendulum to swing to it's highest height, only to suddenly swing back with 10 times the power onto the source of it's momentum. In other words, strong evil begot, will one day return on it's creator with annihilating force. Put this behind you for now, your to fine a lady to let her evil deeds disturb you today. Peace and a Happy Valentine's Day Lady T.
Sky9106- Thank you so much for your comment. It is true that it is horrible when jealousy turns into worse acts. She is a monster but I have to put faith in GOD that he will judge her accordingly. I needed to write this to feel better, but I have learned long ago to put my faith in GOD's hands knowing justice will be served through his wise ways.
Ruby- thank you my friend. I will never forget but I have learned to let go more than ever before. I wanted to write something like this for many years and I am glad I finally did. It was a sense of relief, like I pulled all the hate and anger out and let it fly away far away from me.....I feel better! :-)
Alastar- Thank you so much and I believe in exactly what you said. You said it so eloquently my friend. HUGS!!
Exactly~
Bless.
Very powerful writing you have Lady. I could feel your rage and pain in your words. I'm a fan. Love the pic also. It fits well.
Thank you so much Carolinemd21!
Vincent Moore Level 7 Commenter 3 months ago
Am I correct in thinking that the title means The Monster? because you sure painted one here, the mistrust, the despising,the cheating, stealing and then lastly the responsibility of being the cause of this man's death you write of. How mean a person could do such treachery? I am sad for your friend who lost his life, may the person who caused it find their fate in hell.